tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6767374934878877802.post3268137904854882478..comments2023-05-13T03:35:41.092-07:00Comments on This Teacher reads (and writes): Happy new year and return to 100WCGUUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6767374934878877802.post-77350229774728937192013-01-13T09:17:57.113-08:002013-01-13T09:17:57.113-08:00You painted no scenery but I could see the three s...You painted no scenery but I could see the three sitting in a faraway wilderness or an old shack putting the final touches on a dangerous scheme.<br />I am using http://marvalously.wordpress.com/ but i can never get it registered so I have submitted as anonymous.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6767374934878877802.post-37928713685906316242013-01-09T14:55:05.683-08:002013-01-09T14:55:05.683-08:00Hot diggety dang, I liked the characterisation in ...Hot diggety dang, I liked the characterisation in the voices too!Sarah Mileshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04653120797013525958noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6767374934878877802.post-36244346172557900302013-01-09T12:48:54.043-08:002013-01-09T12:48:54.043-08:00I agree about the 'voice' of the character...I agree about the 'voice' of the characters - comes through with real authenticity. Good to have you back (let's both try to stick with it!Dughall McCormickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14300227706798507301noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6767374934878877802.post-38190771173571135712013-01-08T12:20:42.125-08:002013-01-08T12:20:42.125-08:00I tried with two, but it seemed too contrived..but...I tried with two, but it seemed too contrived..but Iagree that 3 are too many in such a short piece! Annahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03196242830270617518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6767374934878877802.post-45675368749521618152013-01-08T12:17:38.620-08:002013-01-08T12:17:38.620-08:00Thanks, was trying to convey a seedy group of gang...Thanks, was trying to convey a seedy group of gang members.Annahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03196242830270617518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6767374934878877802.post-26236339095196765082013-01-08T11:10:24.987-08:002013-01-08T11:10:24.987-08:00Good but rather confusing. There are three charact...Good but rather confusing. There are three characters, right? I think that might be too many for 100 words.Miriamhttp://andewallscametumblindown.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6767374934878877802.post-43651308344100062382013-01-08T08:29:50.752-08:002013-01-08T08:29:50.752-08:00Now I really enjoyed this - the dialogue was great...Now I really enjoyed this - the dialogue was great - really heard the American twang in my head.Older Mumhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02923339244117157344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6767374934878877802.post-47665404965570410062013-01-08T07:43:55.232-08:002013-01-08T07:43:55.232-08:00I can't help picturing him as a bum-scratcher ...I can't help picturing him as a bum-scratcher but maybe that's just me! I agree - I really admire those who can fit all the extra details into 100 words.Sally-Jaynehttp://sjbwriting.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6767374934878877802.post-84429187597841359672013-01-08T06:15:19.944-08:002013-01-08T06:15:19.944-08:00I agree...my first draft had shuffling feet, nail ...I agree...my first draft had shuffling feet, nail chewing (no bum scratching!) But was wayyyyy over the 100words. I so admire those who can do 100 words and get everything in. <br />I will just have to keep trying :-)Annahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03196242830270617518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6767374934878877802.post-69112696547987028662013-01-08T05:45:46.460-08:002013-01-08T05:45:46.460-08:00Nice to see you back Mrs H :-) I liked this - it ...Nice to see you back Mrs H :-) I liked this - it had a really sinister feel to it.<br /><br />I had to read it a couple of times to work out who was saying what, so I would suggest have something to break up the dialogue (maybe something like Jonny spitting on he grass or scratching his bum) just to help clarify the speaker. Hope that makes sense.Sally-Jaynehttp://sjbwriting.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.com