Tuesday, 13 March 2012

100 words week 34

This week, Julia's prompt is …but I turned it off….
All the details can be found on her page at 
http://jfb57.wordpress.com/2012/03/12/100-word-challenge-for-grown-ups-week34/

I loved last week's picture prompt as I could go to town with descriptions. This week's was a lot more difficult. I have attempted a sci-fi theme; not one I feel especially confident with- but that is what these challenges are all about!
Writing 100 words becomes easier with practice (Better? that's the aim!) although I am still striving for inspiration for a longer project. Have written some book reviews recently which has heightened my desire to be able to do what a novelist does- keep the reader wanting to read on...

Anyway, here is my piece for this week. Find the rest at http://www.linkytools.com/wordpress_list.aspx?id=135539&type=basic


Journey's end.


With all lines of communication severed, Crane and Parks knew their journey home would be perilous. Electrical systems had failed systematically. Fuel levels were sufficient, but oxygen tanks were on critical. All non-essential areas had been shut down and the two surviving crew had relocated to the bridge.
Deep in the recesses of the medical bay, their sought after discovery lay- no longer in suspended animation. LEDs blinked in quickening sequence. Hairline fractures radiated across the toughened glass as the LEDs blink turned to a constant glare. Warning sirens echoed.
“I told you to shut it all down!” hissed Parks.
The lights flashed off-on-off...
“But I turned it off...”

10 comments:

  1. Scary. What kind of monster is this?

    Reminds me of one of the final scenes in Alien.

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    1. Thankyou...I loved those films. This was an alien who was not impressed with its upheaval !

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  2. This piece has excellent tension building word craft. I really like this sentence 'Deep in the recesses of the medical bay, their sought after discovery lay- no longer in suspended animation.' Almost a story in a sentence.

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    1. Thank you Alison, I was rather nervous about this one as its a genre I usually steer away from. Glad you enjoyed it :-)

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  3. It's strange how sometimes the genres people are most nervous of turn out to be ones they are really good at. You built up the suspense brilliantly here, and i love that you haven't described their 'discovery' at all so that everyone can imagine their worst nightmare.

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  4. Thankyou SJ. Heavily influenced by the classic, Alien.

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  5. Thankyou :-) pleased you enjoyed. Thanks for visiting and commenting.

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  6. The alien is beginning its journey. Quite an opener, this piece. Nice work.

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    1. Thanks for visiting and reading. :)

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