Tuesday, 21 February 2012

100 words for grown ups week 31

This week's prompt is "the flip-side." http://jfb57.wordpress.com/2012/02/20/100-word-for-grown-ups-week31/

This is my interpretation :

The intercom’s shrill, incessant tone cut through her slumbers like a knife. Groggily she pressed the button.
“Open up! Let me in, it’s pouring.”
“Um, what day is it?” she mumbled .
“What does that matter? It’s raining, I’m wet through. Let. Me. In...Please...She knows. She’s kicked me out”
Sitting bolt upright now, “How?”
“I told her. Let’s talk.”
“I can’t, I’m not alone.
He staggered back, rain mixed with his tears as he slumped into the car. Now what?
She muted the intercom as the baby beside her cried softly.
He hadn’t been the only one with secrets.


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8 comments:

  1. What a lovely flip at the end and a brilliant story! Thanks for sharing.

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  2. Thanks for reading and commenting. I am still laughing at the one by @himupnorth- classic :D

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  3. Oh I love this! This is my sort of writing. Excellent!

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    1. glad you enjoyed. Thanks for commenting.

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  4. Aha, a flip indeed! Love this!

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    1. Thank you. Originally she was going tobe with another man, but thought this worked better.

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  5. Love it! I'm glad you went with a baby not another man - it was a really unexpected twist at the end. It also keeps it open for something more.

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