This week’s prompt was to include
“Shut the door behind you. I’m exhausted” (http://jfb57.wordpress.com/2012/04/23/100-word-challenge-for-grown-ups-week-39/)
I have been pretty busy with one thing and
another and wasn’t too sure how (or if) to do this one. However, an idea came
to me and this is what I have come up with. Suffice to say that current affairs
influenced me somewhat but this version
is what I would have liked to happen rather than what is...
I’m not quite sure if I have achieved what
I set out to; but here goes anyway...
Heads will roll.
The tension was palpable. Heads would roll, no doubt about that. Integrity and
transparency- that was what had been promised. This error could signal the end.
A
waft of cologne arrived seconds before he strode in. Silence hung heavily as
his narrow eyes flicked impatiently around the room until fixing on the
perpetrator, “You’re fired! Shut the door behind you. I'm exhausted by your
ineptitude.”
“But I’ve done nothing wrong. My behaviour
was totally appropriate; any errors in judgement were beyond my control.”
“Enough! Your desk has been cleared.”
Angrily pulling on his jacket he headed for
the door, “Those who live in glass houses...” and entered the courtroom.
Great twist at the end. Super piece.
ReplyDeleteThankyou. If only...
DeleteThe tension WAS palpable in your piece all the way to the end...made me wonder what the guy/gal did that caused such a ruckus!
ReplyDeleteAs they said, nothing inappropriate...
DeleteThis was brilliant Anna. The characterisation in this is superb. You created 2 really believable characters in so few words.
ReplyDeleteReally pleased you found time to join in this week.
Thank you... the prompt was surprisingly hard...prompted a great variety this week.
DeleteOooh, very taut writing, I'm sure you must know these characters - I do!
ReplyDelete;) It was tricky trying to make it clear who the characters were without being too specific ...
DeleteI love the tension in your room here Anna & would so love to go into the courtroom to see how he deals with the case. Well done for stretching yourself yet again!
ReplyDeleteThanks Julia- I don't know how you keep coming up with these ideas but am so pleased that you do :O)
DeleteAhhh yes the cologne arriving before the man! Been there, smelt that. I enjoyed this very much.
ReplyDeleteThank you for taking the time to read and comment.
DeleteI'm not a fan of perfume/cologne entering before the wearer; could you tell? :P